Want to write sales emails like a pro?
Kristina and Will look at common email mistakes (using real examples) and rewrite them so that you can learn what to do differently.
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Watch the re-write, and check out the before and after emails below! 👇
The Sad State of InMail
Subject: AI/ML and Big Data Tech Team At COMPANY
I hope you are doing well.
I am writing to you to explore opportunities for our companies to work together.
Over the years, we have built robust capabilities in the area of Big data and AI/ML. We work as an offshore delivery center for a number of US-based tech companies. This engagement gives our clients substantial cost advantage and access to a tech team that works 24/7.
COMPANY India Limited is a publicly listed company on India’s largest stock exchange, National Stock Exchange (NSE), having a team of 350+ developers and architects and 30+ global clients with our Offices in the USA, India & East Africa
Our team is based out of US. Would it be possible to meet you over a cup of coffee sometime in the next few days and share our value proposition?
Rep Rep Rep
Here’s what your reader sees
Take 1: Personalization Sandwich 🥪 (29 words)
Subject: Your Newsletter
Will, in your weekly email you mentioned hiring for AI.
Doesn’t look like you’ve filled the role. Have you considered non-US talent for the position?
Love what you’re building.
Take 2: Double Observation (43 words)
Subject: Lavender Product Question
Will – checking out Lavender’s product. Seems like the data it generates is driving a lot of your content.
I’d guess Eng is strapped to focus on roadmap. Any thoughts on a part time AI team to help unearth nuggets for your content strategy?
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